Scene 1
Rachel Washington and Patrick Fritz are from two different worlds, but their interaction with one another is an experience they will never forget. Rachel and Patrick are at Patrick's IT company, so Rachel can learn more about a new software for BioSci, the lab where she works.Secretary: Hello, welcome to Software IT. How may I help you today?
Rachel (friendly): Hi! My name is Rachel Washington and I am a lab technician looking for some new software for my lab. What are some of the options that you have?
Secretary: There are a host of options, but I am going to let you speak with the CEO of the company, Patrick Fritz. He likes to handle certain clients himself.
Rachel: Okay, thank you!
Secretary: You're welcome! He should be down shortly. You can have a seat in our waiting area.
(The secretary picks up the phone to call Patrick Fritz. Rachel walks to the waiting area and sits down. She picks up a magazine and proceeds to read. She looks up when she hears the elevator opening and sees Patrick Fritz walking off of the elevator.)
Patrick: Ms. Washington?
Rachel: Yes?
Patrick: My name is Mr. Patrick Fritz and I will be meeting with you today to discuss some of the software options for your lab.
Rachel: Hello, Patrick. Nice to meet you! Sounds like a plan.
Patrick: We can discuss some of the options in my office. You can follow me.
(Rachel follows Patrick onto the elevator. They enter the elevator and Patrick presses the button to the fourth floor. The elevator reaches the fourth floor. Rachel and Patrick exit the elevator.)
Rachel (fascinated): Wow! This is a beautiful office!
Patrick (coldly): Thanks. You can have a seat.
Rachel: How long have you been working here?
Patrick: I founded the company.
Rachel (confused): Oh. When was it founded?
Patrick (annoyed): Four years ago.
Rachel: Well, you have had a lot of recognition to only be open for four years.
Patrick (coldly): Thanks. Let's start looking at some software options.
(Rachel looks confused and sits down. Patrick logs onto his computer and begins looking for information.)
Hey Briana!
ReplyDeleteI liked your scene. Adding the in between scene changes worked out great for you. I would definitely like to see more of this scene just so I can find out what will happen throughout the conversation between Patrick and Rachel. It seems as though he is upset, and your final scene description allows the audience to want to know more about what will happen next. Overall, good job.
-Chanierah
I think that this is a really good scene. I like how you had the tone of voice and emotions of the characters in the dialog. I really allows me to read the conversation the way you wanted it to be read. I would like to read more of this, and I hope Patrick warms up a bit because he seems kind of like a Debby downer. Keep up the great work.
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